What ya think?

Just_Me · #1 (**permalink**) 7th February 2009 , 05:36 PM

It's just a start at the moment, tbh I'm stuck and I don't really know what more I can do..

Can anyone help me out please? What do you think it lacks or needs adding?

Dan

https://dl-web.getdropbox.com/get/Song1.mp3?w=84324625

saxman · #2 (**permalink**) 7th February 2009 , 06:00 PM

I tried but I get an error on the website.

Quote:

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It seems you don't belong here! You should probably try logging in?

Did you follow their instructions for creating a "public link"?;
https://www.getdropbox.com/help/16

Just_Me · #3 (**permalink**) 7th February 2009 , 06:06 PM

Ohh yeah I see what you mean

Ummm, think I've done it now lol

https://dl.getdropbox.com/u/585771/Song1.mp3

Dan

sureno · #4 (**permalink**) 7th February 2009 , 06:46 PM

will listen later mate, got to go my gig now

Dave Boulden · #5 (**permalink**) 7th February 2009 , 09:07 PM

Don't want to sound glib or unnecessarily obvious, but what I think it seriously needs is some sort of melody... whether that be one or two motifs that you weave in and out to match the existing evolving layered approach or as a more conventional lead instrument playing a solo melody.

waxxy · #6 (**permalink**) 8th February 2009 , 08:11 AM

its really good for a intro just when you think its gona kick it chemical brothers style it ends but for a start i think its really good especially the use of the layer cake sample ..make it longer and id kick it with harder drums just as your layer cake sample comes in at the end.and like dave said think of a melody or a sound too cut threw the ambience to take it up a level.and one the breakdowns a piano with quite a bit of reverb and delay would go well with the chords youve got at the beginning ..hope this helps ..post back as you add more too it and keep it up bud

Just_Me · #7 (**permalink**) 8th February 2009 , 01:51 PM

Thanks for the opinions guys. Feel like crap at the moment with the flu so think it's gonna be a few days before I'll be able to do anymore work on the song.

Took your opinions onboard, I've done a little more work on it today, added some more to the bassline and also added a simple melody. Next I'll add some sort of piano or something to made the chords stand out better.

Cheers

Dan

sureno · #8 (**permalink**) 8th February 2009 , 02:47 PM

i think you should work on the mix, thicken it up and may be extend it, i think you should keep this version as again a "reprise" type edit, i really really really liked this very ambient chilled and cool, i was going to say add "welcome to the layer cake" lib a bit more but then it came in so

just really need to make it louder but keep its tranquility. one point though i feel the drums dont quite line up??? may want to look into that? the 2nd kick sound i believe

Just_Me · #9 (**permalink**) 8th February 2009 , 04:57 PM

Thanks Sureno

Will carry on working on this tune when I don't feel like death lol

Dan

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Just_Me Junior Member Join Date: Feb 2009 Posts: 23	What ya think? It's just a start at the moment, tbh I'm stuck and I don't really know what more I can do.. Can anyone help me out please? What do you think it lacks or needs adding? Dan https://dl-web.getdropbox.com/get/Song1.mp3?w=84324625
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#8 (permalink) 8th February 2009 , 02:47 PM
sureno Forum Idol Join Date: Jul 2008 Location: west london depot Posts: 7,775	i think you should work on the mix, thicken it up and may be extend it, i think you should keep this version as again a "reprise" type edit, i really really really liked this very ambient chilled and cool, i was going to say add "welcome to the layer cake" lib a bit more but then it came in so just really need to make it louder but keep its tranquility. one point though i feel the drums dont quite line up??? may want to look into that? the 2nd kick sound i believe ______________________________ Im a Mac and Windows 7 was not my idea WWW.SURENO.CO.UK www.myspace.com/djsureno http://twitter.com/djsureno
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#3 (permalink) 7th February 2009 , 06:06 PM
Just_Me Junior Member Join Date: Feb 2009 Posts: 23	Ohh yeah I see what you mean Ummm, think I've done it now lol https://dl.getdropbox.com/u/585771/Song1.mp3 Dan
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#6 (permalink) 8th February 2009 , 08:11 AM
waxxy Rave Digga Join Date: Jul 2008 Posts: 1,197	its really good for a intro just when you think its gona kick it chemical brothers style it ends but for a start i think its really good especially the use of the layer cake sample ..make it longer and id kick it with harder drums just as your layer cake sample comes in at the end.and like dave said think of a melody or a sound too cut threw the ambience to take it up a level.and one the breakdowns a piano with quite a bit of reverb and delay would go well with the chords youve got at the beginning ..hope this helps ..post back as you add more too it and keep it up bud
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#7 (permalink) 8th February 2009 , 01:51 PM
Just_Me Junior Member Join Date: Feb 2009 Posts: 23	Thanks for the opinions guys. Feel like crap at the moment with the flu so think it's gonna be a few days before I'll be able to do anymore work on the song. Took your opinions onboard, I've done a little more work on it today, added some more to the bassline and also added a simple melody. Next I'll add some sort of piano or something to made the chords stand out better. Cheers Dan
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#9 (permalink) 8th February 2009 , 04:57 PM
Just_Me Junior Member Join Date: Feb 2009 Posts: 23	Thanks Sureno Will carry on working on this tune when I don't feel like death lol Dan
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